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My opinion on certificate craze. There is a tendency among us students that so many students are crazy about certificate craze.And because of this,most of these students ignore their school's work even skip class to prepare their certificate craze.And why they all crazy about certificate craze? As far as I know some of they think their ability should be proved by certificate,and the more certificate they get they can find a good job easier.And the others think there are so many students prepare certificate craze,if they don't do the same they would in a disadvantage position.Start on this purpose,these students give up their class and even their dream,absolutely get lost. On my opinion,we students don't need certificate craze to prove ourselves.We should know a student must pay their attention on their learning and enjoy our life in school.A student should have his or her dream about future,certificate craze just a way to find a job. Remember we students should keep our eye on learning.