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2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

发布时间:2014-06-09 15:38浏览次数:11381
要求:

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in people's life and then explain the consequences of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

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正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;文中词汇表达较灵活丰富,不过请检查文章的单词拼写;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。

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Now in the street you can see more cars than before.Cars make us convenice,but with it appers lots of traffic accidents happen,such as drunk driving. Drunk driving is common.Some people may ignore it.They think after drinking they can also concentrate on driving.And after some times drunk driving,they are still safe.Maybe they are lucky.But in fact everyday thousands of traffic accidents happen because of it and people die.The danger of it arouses us to do something. Now traffic police is serious on fighting against drunk driving.Every night many policemen are working in the street to test drivers.Once drunk drivers found,they will be punished very hard.Some mersures also be taken. Fighting against drunk driving is very important.Though it is less than before,we also should be hard on it.I hope in the future,no drunk driving accident happens.

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