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I have a good friend. she is a beautiful girl. she has long black hair, two big black eyes and a red mouth. her voice is better. she is good at singing. She is a clever girl. She likes reading books , playing computer games and chess. she is also nice. she often helps us . our classmates like her very much. I have a good friend ,I think she is the most prettiest of our girl-friends. she has long black hair, two big black eyes and a red mouth, her voice is better,she is good at in singing.we are all like singing her song. She is a bright girl,she likes reading novels,playing ping-pang.and she is very nice.she often helps us. so she is popular among my friends.