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The Impact of the Internet on Interpersonal Communication there is no deny that the internet is our life can't leave.nowadays,more and more people like communication with internet.there is no doubt that the internet bring convenient to us.but i think we should't addition to the internet.i think we need communication face to face. there are three reasons.firstly,face to face can make people relationship more clostly.secondly,if we always communication with internet.in the future,someday may be we will lost our base ability of face to face communication.the last but no least,if we awalys surf the internet.it will harmful to our health.especially hurt to our eyes.so,for our health,we should refluse all the time communication on the internet. it goes without saying that we need face to face communication and refluse aways communication on the internet.let us to do it from ourselves.
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