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what are your favorite sport ? to me , my favorite sport is playing football ! football always brings me joy , it is not only a exciting game , but also can help me to learn now friends . one day , when i was on the way of home , i find a football and played it with my friends by chance , i love playing football deeply since that day , after that day , i often to play football with my friends both the new and the old , and even participate the football competition . today i find my dream through football , my dream is to be a professional football player ,i also have a idol ,he is David Beckham , i believe i will be such successful , football let me to broaden my social circle and let me find my dream , i love it forever !!