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Recently,there is a controversial issue whether people should put all eggs in one basket.Some people hold the opinion that we can gain the maximum profits by putting all eggs in one basket.However,others argue that it is unwise way if all eggs are broken . In my perspective ,putting all eggs in one basket is unwise. There are some following reasons.For one thing ,if the basket,with all eggs ,drop from the desk,it means that all eggs are broken .In contrast,we can reduce the possibility of broking eggs if we put eggs seperatly in each basket.For another,