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The Visit to My Hometown If a foreign friend of mine is coming to my hometown,I must take her to visit some places which can appear us special and let her enjoy some delicious food. Firstly I will take her to the"Chaganhu"which is a famous place in our province.Every winter, there will be a large activity of hunting fish.And fish from there is very delicious.Expect that,there are many other sights. We can boat on the river and walk in the park. Secondly I will take her to the "Changbai"mountain.On the top of it,there is a beautiful pool.And in the mountain we can enjoy delicious local food. Finally,I will take her to my high school where I study there years.I hope that she can feel my life and know me more. I very expect her arrival.And I hope she can like my hometown.