文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;全文结构不够严谨,文中很少使用衔接词和过渡词。
This is our house.It's nice and big!It's a warm world. All family are live in it. Ha!This is my parents'room.It's big.My father is sit on the this chair.My mother is sleep on this bed. This is my room.It's big,too.It's name's "Ann park" because it's very lovely and interesting.This is my desk.Everyday I do homework here.This is my bed.It's pink because pink is my favourite color. This is our sitting room.It's tidy.It has a table,four chairs,a TV,a mat and a flower.We often sing songs here and watch TV here. This is our book room.It's big but small than the sitting room.It has many many wonderful books.We are read books and newspapers here. This is our bathroom.It's big.We take baths,wash faces and brush teeth here. Our house!Our warm world!I love U!