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There is a saying that 'Seeing is believing.'How do you think that ?Is it relly a truth.No It depends.For example,The area between Chen and Cai was in great poverty,Confucius has not had the meal for a long time ,his disciple, Yan Hui Tried his best to get some rice and cooked it for Confucius right away but during the cooking time ,Confucius noticed that Yan Hui was sneaking a handful rice in the pan For a while, Rice was cooked, YanHui treat Confucius, Confucius pretended not to see (YanHui Stealing the food). Confucius said: "i just dreamed of my ancestors and want to sacrifice them by some clean dinner " YanHui replied: "it's not clean,there was just ash float into the pot (dirty rice), so i just grab it to eat." Confucius sighs: "(supposedly) Seeing is Believing, but is not necessarily reliable; should believe my heart, my heart also can not believe it. You remember, it is not easy to understand a person!" So it is difficult to know the truth, By this story,you can never draw a conclusion right away just hear or see something ,for it is not sensible.
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