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Stay health These days,people are inclined to stay home.They are engaged in playing computer games,chatting onlineat the expense of the health.Recently the phenomenon has become a heated topic.These problems should be solved timely.But what the best way to stay health worried us?As far as i am concerned,people should go out and do some outdoor activities.spending more time on computer is unworthy.there is sufficent evidence to show that stay up to late does harm to our health.so we ought to go to bed early,get up early and go out to do some exercise ,breathe fresh air,Besides,walking after dinner is beneficial for us.some male think they are too fat and eat less.In reality,it is unhealthy.the best way to lose weight is running every day.
