文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;文章在句法方面做的很棒,从句和复杂句的使用不错;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
There is an old saying that:it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.The reason why I insist on the viewpoint that we are all college's students and we will go to work a few years after.If we put all eggs in the same basket it would be had bad influence to us. With the social competition,we should develop ourselves and do better.My friend Lily is a student who is literature procession and she do better on her major.When she graduated ,she find that it is too many student study about it and she hardly has any advantages.So when I came to university,she told me that I should learn something no include my major like compter and English.We must be prepared to learning something which has good benefit on our nature. To sum up,we are the person who has different aspects and we should fact varible truth.Remeber the old saying:it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.