拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;可适当增加长句和复杂句的使用;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
There is an old saying that:it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.The reason why I insist on the viewpoint that we are all college's students and we will go to work a few years after.If we put all eggs in the same basket it would be had influence to us. With the social competition,we should elevate ourselves and do better.My friend Lily is a student who is literature program and she do better on her major.When she graduated,she find that it is too many student study about it and she hardly has any advantages.When I entered college, she told me to learn English and computer.We must be prepared to learning something good for us. To sum up,we are the person who has different aspects and we should fact varible truth.Remeber the old saying:it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.