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Welcome to my hometown!I am distinctly glad to introduce my hometown,Maoming,a city with clear rives and green mountains. As we all know,if you travel to Beijing,you have to go to The ChangChang.And if you visit Maoming,you have to go the beach in the east of the city,which is famous as "the first beach in China".Therefore,there is no denying that this beach is a correctly nice choose for you to enjoy you summer vocation. In addition, drifting is worth to try.In Maoming,there are many place to drift.Some are nature,others are artificial. However,if you feel boring about water,don't worry.You can climb the mountains,such Tianma Mountain,which is the highest mountain in Maoming.As a matter of fact,there are many beautiful place in Maoming,so I believe that you would like this city when you visit it.
