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Memo:to my colleage Mary Chen Time:December 23th,2008 composition :I am Liming.Because of it's time for you to go to Bijing on business about a week,you can't talk about the matter that the firm will hold a party.it 's up to you to go to Beijing .Mary wil informyou of everyone finally decide on the time , address and prepare with something.