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Owing to the convenience of it,disposal bags had been used widespread which cause some problems.Now I will talk about the problems that are caused by disposal bags. First,disposal bags are abandoned casually by people who buy something needed to be put into disposal bags.However,they can do a lot of harm to the environment,especially to the farmlands.There are a large number of farmlands polluted heavily by the disposal bags so the seeds couldn't be planted on them.Even worse,disposal bags are made of oil and so on.To make them consume much oil every year and then turn up the phenomena of being lack in oil.And the lack of recycle of disposal bags aggravates that. So,Limiting the use of disposal bags makes the environment become more beautiful and can save our most valuable resources.