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In current,many families have only one child.They share all the love to the only child.It is not incommon to see that parents spoil their child.They do everything for them instead of foster their ability to be independent.Parents suppose that the children should pay more attention to studying,They believe that it is meaningless to do other things except learning. To cultivate chiidren's independence, what can the parents do? First of all, in my opinion,give them adequate space to grow,parents should encourage children to play free, to think free.Secondly,parents should tell the children that they can do everything they can by themselves by hard work.Once they achive their goal independently,they will be more confident and more independent.