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My best fering Li will come here,which is my hometown.I plan take he to travel my town.so as to he conmunated with us,I to be a translater.My town has a flower field,so most of butterfly and bee ,such a beautful,always in here.There is above of all in my thought. Beside,I will take take he to river-side,because there have a lot of conches,may be take some back home. Last but not least,I will bring he to see my field.Three month ago,I pant some vegetables in my field.I pay my time and careful it,so it has grown up healthy.I think he will very like the field. We go by the three places as well as to another places. Go back home. Have dinner.
