3.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;作者词汇表达较为熟练,高级词汇使用不是很多;行为稍欠流畅,过渡词用的还可以。
Dear Mr.and Mrs.Brown, I'm writing to you from my home in China.I returned home safe and sound.When thinking of the wonderful days I spent in New Orleans, I just can't help thinking of both of you.It was so kind of you to have provided everything to make my stay there such a happy experience.I’ve learned so much, not only English but also culture.And I really enjoyed a great deal, the fun and laughter we shared with each other.Thank you very much.I'll always remember this trip as well as your kindness.
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