可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;从句数量不足;文中拼写错误比较多,用词也稍显贫乏。
My friend name is Xiaoling .she is a lovely girl.She intersting in singing .she has big eyes and long hair.She like clambing and singing .she also my classmante.She is good at math .I offen ask she some questions. She is friendly .She is lovely as much so as an angel.