从句数量偏少;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构;作者高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间,词汇表达灵活性也要提高,单词拼写错误较多。
I am LiHua ,a Senior Grade Two student at our school.I meet your requirements:for one thing,I once worked as an editor in school magazine and equally my work.For another,I have participated in English writing competiton for many times,kown how to attart the attention of the reader.Furthermore,I am also a member of association of the campus English writing.I am enclosing @y resume for you kind consideration and reference.I would very honoed if you could offer me an opportunity for an interview. I am looking forword to your kind reply at your earliest convenience.