若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达,更能较熟练地使用一定的高级词汇;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
I am LiHua,a Senior Grade Two student at our school.I meet your requirements:for one thing,I once worked as an editor in school magazine and equally my work.For another,I have participated in English writing competiton for many times,known how to attart the attention of the reader.Furthermore,I am also a member of association of the campus English writing.I am enclosing resume for you kind consideration and reference.I would very honored if you could offer me an opportunity for an interview. I am looking forward to your kind reply at your earliest convenience.