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From the part,if I have foreign friends were going to visit my hometown,I will take him/she visit those old buildings,original culture and China foods.Now I will share with you about why does me to do. On the one hand,China's old building had some special styles,for example,in Ming dynasty's have the Great Wall,the Frobidden City and the Suzhou's garden,ect.These buildings have a long history.Meanwhile, they are important essential for China.On the other hand,China food is very well-known by the world areas,many foreign friends like Chinese food. It is very interesting about the China culture,like the Near Year Picture.In China,the dragon is symbol strong and powerful. All in all,in China,some places are worthy visit,it is availabe for foreign friends know China.