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How to improve school safety Since the 2010 years,my country took a place some campus about hit.This is maked people so amazed and many people were stuck in this accident.The accident is so amazing,and then we should how to improve our school safety. First,i think we should tell to people keep calm down if meet some difficult accident and think about how to deal with it.Second,we should know harmful to people is illegal,it is possible to put you into prison,make them know this is illegal.Third,the school must carefully,don't happen to this accident.