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Nowdays,online shopping are become more and more popular.There are much advantages for us to buy something we need,but it also has some disadvantages in terms of the safe of our money and the goods quality . Oline shopping make our life convenient that we can buy some goods stay at home and sit infront of the computer.Moreover,there are varity produces provided and we can comparision it between different providers.Meanwhile,sometimes we will do not satisify with the produce we bought online because of the corlor difference from the picture online or the size uncomfortable.And sometime we need to spend much time choosing the goods . To sum up,online shopping in a reasonable way,do not take much time and much money on it.