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Nowadays Internet has become extremely popular with us which cause a hot disscus about whether it is useful to us.In this essay I will explain it. Of course,some think that Internet is of great help to us including increase the rate of study and working.In this way,the complexing job can be done by us easily with the help of Internet.And we can acquire the first information in time to take the quick actionto deal with problems.What's more,Internet is a convinent tool to make new friends.However,every coin has two sides,others think that Internet makes youth addicted to it so their study is badly influenced.Even worse,Internet may consume most of vaulable time and at the same time there are many cheating activities on the Internet. In my opinion,Internet is a double-edged sword,only we use properly can it have good influence on us.