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I think you must be curious about Mid-Autumn Day.Mid-Autumn Day is a traditional festival of China which has a long history.It was a day mean the person in family can be together,so people always enjoying the day with their familys.On Mid-Autumn Day people will come to their homeland to have dinner with their familys even though they were very busy and they are very far from their homeland.And if the night is moonlight,people will eat mooncake with their familys while they enjoying the moonlight.The Chinese love Mid-Autumn Day very much,I hope you will like the day too. yours,Li Hua.