过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;可适当增加几条从句;作者词汇表达比较多样,也能较好的使用一些高级词汇。
There are so many beautiful things in the world, but life is limited. Thus, it is important for us to make full use of the time and to make our life more meaningful. As the saying goes that the greatest use of life is to spend it for something that will outlast it. When it comes to the question" What will you do to make your life more meaningful?" people vary in their opinions and everyone has his own interpretation of the meaningful life. Some people think that a meaningful life means that there are plenty of money and lots of freedom. As far as I'm concerned, first of all, We should try our best to help people in trouble, such as helping children in remote mountainous areas, as well as people with disabilities. In addition, we should better learn some forain language and reaveling abroad in order to broad our eyesight. Last but not at least, we must study hard and contribut to our motherland. In a world, if we want to have a meaningful life, we must set a goal and work or study hard to achieve the goal.