单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;文中从句过少;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Today is Moday.I don't like this one day.I always feel dizzy on Monday morning.I don't know why,and I don't hope feel dizzy.I don't want to is. In afternoon,I and my friend Zhang Wen,we speak in short article.we want to write a short article,about young love.I don't think we should write it,but Zhang wen doesn't agree with me."All right."I only can say it.