作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;全文结构较为严谨。
If foreign friend of mine visit my hometown,I will recommend he or she to The Great Wall.Why? The main reason of my decision is that The Great Wall is ancient Chinese pround.The Great Wall is a mystery none can solve,because The Great Wall is very grand,and then the ancient people how to build that without crane and other modern machine,only depend on the power of people and cattle. The second reason is that The Great Wall has played an important role in ancient China. Visiting The Great Wall help to introduce Chinese history for my foreign friend. The Great Wall is a symbol of ancient Chinese wisdom.