可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;全文结构较为严谨。
If a foreign friend of mine visit my hometown,I will recommend he or she to view The Great Wall.Why? The main reason of my decision is that The Great Wall is ancient Chinese pround.The Great Wall is a mystery none can solve,because The Great Wall is very grand,and then the ancient people how to build that without crane and other modern machine,only depend on the power of people and cattle. The second reason is that The Great Wall has played an important role in ancient China. Visiting The Great Wall help to introduce Chinese history for foreign friend of mine. The Great Wall is a symbol of ancient Chinese wisdom.