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Tina will go to BeiJing.She want to see the Great Wall and other beautiful sights.Because she thinks China is a rich and coloful national,she likes BeiJing.And she will in a beautiful place to have fun. But Jim has a strange idea.He didn't want to go anywhere.He want to stay at home.Because he thinks travel is tired.And stay at home will have a good rest. Though have many homework,but I want to go to Tibet.Because there have stretch as far as eye can see grassland and gathering in crowds and groups of cattle and sheep.I think it's very beautiful. Where are you want to go?