雅思写作范文:父母应该多陪孩子

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children like tender grow in greenhouse, they need love,care, communication.So parents are just like hard gardeners.they should water their "flowers"everyday,to make them grow up in a way which is filled up with love.Whatever thief qpproach of parents express their love?There is no doubt that they should spend more time accompany their children. With the society development, the pressure of life is increasing.the mojarity of parents choose to work hard day and night ,from day to day, they become more and more neglect their children .In parents' mind ,money can make up children ,can bring happiness to them .So they spend too much time on their work and too little time on their children .the founder of millet , LeiJun,he once said "you don't accompany your children ,what are you blind busy with?"He think no matter how busy you are ,you should spend some time on children .they are the most important in your life. In my experience .I never stay with my parents ,let alone ,they can spend more time on me .I always think I am alone in the world . If parents seldom accompany their children ,children will become more and more negative .As investigation shown ,most children think the best precious present is that their parents usually accompany them .So parents leave aside your work sometimes , give your child a kiss ,a hug ,and stay with him often .As for children ,maybe that is enough.