拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;简单句偏多,应增加从句使用;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
The internet In the modern society,internet plays a important role in our life.The topic of the advantages and disadvantages of internet is also hot.There are a lot of views on it. As everyone knows,different people have different opinion.Some people think that is more beneficial.They believe that can make the study and work more effective.What's more,it can also relax our mind and body.But the others don't agree with it.They consider a lot of shortcomings.Such as addiction on the internet,which makes you out of control yourself.Seriously you will lose interesting on study.As to me,my view is different from their.Internet is good to us,also bad to us.On the one hand,if you use it properly it may be a lot of use.But on the other hand,if you use it only for satisfying yourself it is a bad thing. In a word,one coin has two sides.So does internet.