语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;有效地采用了一些简单的从句为文章增色;文中词汇表达丰富度要加强,同时要注意单词拼写。
In China The most worthyplace have to beijing。beijing is the capital of china,it is a long history city.so if my foreign friend is gong to visit my hometown,I will recommend him the beijing. beijing not only have long history art but also is the most foreigns crowed,beijing have more interestingplaces,such as GreatWall、gugong、tiananmensquare.In China have says gonging that"He who has never been to the Great Wall is not a true man" The food is famous of beijing dark,it is so delicious.