简单句比重稍微偏高,注意极个别句子错误;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;作者词汇使用较为丰富熟练,单词拼写方面要更仔细。
Nowadays,a saying,it is unwise to put all your eggs in the one basket, has brought a hoe debate.In other word,we should pay much attention something else rather than iust a thing which you are beloved. Numourous example can illustrate this top in our daily life.On one hand ,with the repaidly development of the economic,an increacing number invest in business.We should distract our money in many filed not only one.Then,we can avoid losting all money in one program.On the other hand,students ,in school,should learn all courses,instanding of the favoriate courses.Only do this ,can he/she get the ideal progress. In short,we should have been thought twice before we take action.Personally speaking,I thought it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.