小学一年级英语作文:My dog

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My dog's name is Garry.It is nine this year.He is a very stupid dog.I hate him very.But my mother is very like him.She always brings it bone and meat.So now it is very fat.I hate him very much.I think that it is nearly to die.So I'm very happy.I hope that it will die quickly.So i can be very happy soon.