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Nowadays,a saying,it is unwise to put all your eggs in the one basket, has brought a hoe debate.In other words,we should pay much attention something else rather than just a thing which you are beloved. Numourous example can illustrate this phenomenon in our daily life.On the one hand,with the economic repaidly development,an increacing number of person invest in business.We should put our money in many filed not only one.Then,we can avoid losting all money in one program.On the other hand,students,in school,should learn all courses,instead of the faouriate courses.Only do this,can we get the ideal progress. In short,we should have been thought twice before we take action.Personally speaking,I thought it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.