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语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；可增加文中从句的使用量；高级词汇使用贫乏，注意一下个别拼写错误。
there is a remark that"the greatest use of life is to spend it for something that will outlast it" that's absolutely true.imagine that if your life is about nothing but eating to live,then do you think it's just a waste of time?and it's like you've merely taking a short hike to this wonderful world,you have nothing left.but if you spend your time in doing some meaningful things,your life will be lasting forever.let's take thomas edison for example,he had spent his lifetime inventing things,thus,he has been rememberd by all of us with his magnificant inventions. a lot of people around me are fooling around,and sometimes i know i'm just like them.but when i think of it,i feel terrible.questions came into my mind,"will i spend my whole life like this?”“will i regret wasting my time when i was young?"then,i make up my mind to make a change.as for me,being a teacher is what i think is meaningful.so i decide to be a teacher.teachers can fill students will konwledge,they can also tutor them to grow up to be real person,to be useful. so,to be a teacher in the future,i must start working hard right away.as a college student,since i've decided to working hard,it's not only mean to study hard in class,but also to grasp every oppotunities to training myself out of class.and what's more,never give up.
可可英语 - 划词释义
