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I don't think taking participate in sports is worthwhile only when you win something.Sports requre a lot of physical excercise.Take sport not only make your body stonger but also make your brain smart.Physical excercise can benefit both physical and mental health.Though win someting in a sport can make you feel worh.But the most import part of participate in sports is for win something that the effert you make.During the excercise you practise your body and your mand.During the peroid you learn something.Also may lost something.For example when you play football.Although win the game it can make you feel better.But the procedure you take part in can also be as much worth as win something.You may win you may lose it doesn't matter.Life is long you cann't alwasy lose like to you cann't always win.Take it easy!Enjoy the whole procedure not only the result.You could live a happer life.