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2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

发布时间:2014-06-09 15:38浏览次数:11355
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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in people's life and then explain the consequences of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

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句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达,更能较熟练地使用一定的高级词汇;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。

用户练习作文:

As is vividly depicted in the cartoon above,nowadays people are crossing the street looking at their cellphones often .Most of them are addicted to social networks . And it is obvious that cellphone plays a significant role in their daily life. As we all know,everything has two sides. Cellphone has both the advantages and the disadvantages.Cellphone brings us a lot of convenience.We can read the latest news in the cellphone.It's just like a small computer that we can collect the information we want at all time.However,many people seem to rely on cellphone .They just hold their cellphone everywhere at any time in order to keep in touch with their friends , watch a sport game or TV series.And they spend less time with their family. The oversing of coputer can do a lot of harm to out body.We should use the cellphone properly.

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