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Expo 2010 Shanghai China will be a great event to explore the full potential of urben life in the 21st century.It starts on May 1st,and finishes on October 30th.The topic of the Expo is “Better city,Better life”.It lets many countries show the civilization of their cities so that they can communicate the experience on developing with each other.It also helps to find the new methods to explore the living environment of human,the way to live as well as the work conditions.China also wants to learn how to create the natural society and insist on lasting developing through Expo.It aims to attract 200 countries ,international-exhibitions and 70 millions of visitors. In my opinion,it is quite necessary for China to hold the Expo because China is a developing country. It helps China to develop economy.