句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;作者词汇量有些小,要注意检查拼写错误;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
my new teacher is a beautiful girl who teaches my english with big eyes. i am not at the top in our class ,but the teacher is very strict to me .she is too busy to out of eat .she always teaches us the way how to learn english ,orgnized by the leader of our school and the students'parents.