单词拼写做的不错,文中词汇表达贫乏;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
HI! I have a good friend. It is a boy. His mane is Tom.He is tall and thin.He have short hair. He is friendly. But sometimes he is serious. His favourite food is beef,me too. He like play computer, me too. He like black.He like weekend. This is my good friend.