作者词汇量积累不错,高级词汇积累较少;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;不能熟练使用过渡词,基本没有衔接词。
My good friend is Me. She’s a girl. She is my classmate. Me is tall and thin. She has two big eyes and long hair. She likes listening to music and reading books. Sometimes we listen to music together. She likes summer. Because she can swim in the summer holiday. She likes pink and white. She is in Class Four, Grade Six with me. She usually goes to school by motor cycle. Sometimes she goes to school on foot. We often go shopping together on the weekend. We will be good friends forever. I have a good friend.She is my classmate,her name is Tracy.She is a pretty girl. She studies in Tiandong No.2 Middle school,she is in Class 1,Grade 1.She studies hard all day.And she can speaks Japanese English and Chinese very well.So she often help my English and Japanese.I thank you for her help. And I help her math, too.Because my math is very good. We learn from each other and help each other. Tracy often in a white T-shirt and a black skirt.We are all think she is a lovely girl.And Tracy likes sports very much. She likes playing basketball,football,ping-pong and badminton very much. So we are often play them. Tracy has a big fame,there are nine people in her family.They are her mother,her father,her brother sister,her uncle,her aunt,her grandparents and her.She loves her family very much. My name is Michelle. In my class, there is a girl. She has a round face, a small nose, two big eyes, a small mouth and two big ears. Her eyes look like grapes. Her hair is short and black. She is tall and beautiful. She looks like a middle school student. Do you know who is she? Yes, she is Fanny, one of my good friends. She seems to have a special interest in music. Any time she hears the music, she will dance. Though she dances badly, she still loses herself in the music. I think she will be a dancer in the future. But she wants to be a writer. This is my good friend. We feel happy when we are together. What about your good friend? Can you tell me something about your good friend? She is my good friend. , Grade4 of Tianjiao Primary School. HE’s a model student. HE’s clever and she’s helpful, too. He often helps teachers and young students at school. She is good at Chinese, maths, English, arts and crafts, music and so on. She has a lot of hobbies. She likes painting and drawing. And she likes listening to music, having picnics with her parents. Oh yeah, she likes fishing, too. But she doesn’t like playing basketball, football, table tennis or volleyball. Zhang Ying is the best friend of mine. I like playing with her. We always work together and help each other. I have a good friend. She is a girl. And she is pretty. She is very good at English! And her English grades are very well! My good friend is a student of HengFu Road Middle School in class five junior one. She is 13 years old. She is 1 years older than me. And she has two beautiful eyes. She has a cherry mouth and a little nose. She loves to smile. And her smile is very beautiful. Do you know her hobby? Let me tell you! Her favourite sport is badminton. She enjoys doing housework and playing computer games. So her mother loves her very much. And all of her family love her, too. I am very happy to be her friends!!