请作者增加高级词汇的使用,单词拼写做的很好;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
My good friend is Me. She’s a girl. She is my classmate. Me is tall and thin. She has two big eyes and long hair. She likes listening to music and reading books. Sometimes we listen to music together. She likes summer. Because she can swim in the summer holiday. She likes pink and white. She is in Class Four, Grade Six with me. She usually goes to school by motor cycle. Sometimes she goes to school on foot. We often go shopping together on the weekend. We will be good friends forever. I have a good friend.She is my classmate,her name is Tracy.She is a pretty girl. She studies in Tiandong No.2 Middle school,she is in Class 1,Grade 1.She studies hard all day.And she can speaks Japanese English and Chinese very well.So she often help my English and Japanese.I thank you for her help. And I help her math, too.Because my math is very good. We learn from each other and help each other. Tracy often in a white T-shirt and a black skirt.We are all think she is a lovely girl.And Tracy likes sports very much. She likes playing basketball,football,ping-pong and badminton very much. So we are often play them. Tracy has a big fame,there are nine people in her family.They are her mother,her father,her brother sister,her uncle,her aunt,her grandparents and her.She loves her family very much. My name is Michelle. In my class, there is a girl. She has a round face, a small nose, two big eyes, a small mouth and two big ears. Her eyes look like grapes. Her hair is short and black. She is tall and beautiful. She looks like a middle school student. Do you know who is she? Yes, she is Fanny, one of my good friends. She seems to have a special interest in music. Any time she hears the music, she will dance. Though she dances badly, she still loses herself in the music. I think she will be a dancer in the future. But she wants to be a writer. This is my good friend. We feel happy when we are together. What about your good friend? Can you tell me something about your good friend? She is my good friend. , Grade4 of Tianjiao Primary School. HE’s a model student. HE’s clever and she’s helpful, too. He often helps teachers and young students at school. She is good at Chinese, maths, English, arts and crafts, music and so on. She has a lot of hobbies. She likes painting and drawing. And she likes listening to music, having picnics with her parents. Oh yeah, she likes fishing, too. But she doesn’t like playing basketball, football, table tennis or volleyball. Zhang Ying is the best friend of mine. I like playing with her. We always work together and help each other. I have a good friend. She is a girl. And she is pretty. She is very good at English! And her English grades are very well! My good friend is a student of HengFu Road Middle School in class five junior one. She is 13 years old. She is 1 years older than me. And she has two beautiful eyes. She has a cherry mouth and a little nose. She loves to smile. And her smile is very beautiful. Do you know her hobby? Let me tell you! Her favourite sport is badminton. She enjoys doing housework and playing computer games. So her mother loves her very much. And all of her family love her, too. I am very happy to be her friends!! Zeng Qiao is one of my friends. She is a beautiful, outgoingand good-tempered girl. She smiles frequently. I think it’s her smile that makes her beauty. We live in the same dormitory, so that we always stay together, no matter going to classroom or having dinners. At first, I don’t like her very much, because she is always talking. It seems that she can’t stop open her mouth. I am a little bit quiet and introverted, so I seldom talk to others. But gradually, I find that she can have influence on others by what she says. Zeng Qiao likes sharing interesting things with others. For example, she likes telling us her funny stories of her childhood or her former classmates. She always tells me that I should be more extroverted and learn to talk to others. Under the influence of her, I communicate with others more frequently and I find that it feels so great. I am so grateful that I can have such a good friend. Zhang Dong is my best friend. He entered our class last semester. He is a boy. Both of us are good at English, so we often have a chat in English in our spare time. After school, we often play football together on the playground. He runs so fast that I can not catch up with him. He is an excellent student. He not only gets good marks in all subjects but also is very kind and modest. He loves popular songs and also classical music. There are three people in his family and he is the only child. His father is a doctor and his mother is a Beijing Opera actress. Though Zhang Dong's family is wealthy, he is usually simply dressed. He has a dream which is to be a lawyer. Such is my friend, a clever and kind boy. He is highly praised by the teachers and students. Her father is a business man. He goes to work by car. He has got a big company. He is great! Her mother is an accountant in her father’s company. She goes to work with her father. She gets up at 8:30. Sometimes they go to work early, so Angel must cook breakfast for her grandma. She cooks well. Angel says she is going to visit me this weekend. I cannot wait!