可适当增加长句和复杂句的使用;能较灵活地使用部分高级词汇,有基础拼写错误,需要注意一下;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
As we know that our feelings effect our lives. keepping a good mood is important to our lives, and proper relaxation is a great way to lead us to find happy. With the development of our society,citizens are busy with studies,works and interpersonal relationship.We try our best to save times,but we have no time to enjoy our lives.And as phone technology improves,we spent more and more time in the mobile phone networks.Almost everyone who has mobile phone last in the virtual world and is away from their families,friends.So, how can they find the happiness?But we always feel tired about everything and we couldn't describe why we are so tired.It tells us that we need a good way to relax yourselves.Reading books,listening musics,talking to your friends,going out and hugging the world. Changing your stressful lifes,just relaxing,you will find happiness is always around you.