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Dear Mary Thank you for inviting me to go to your birthday party.It's my pleasure.But I have a lot of things to do. First,the teachers assigned a lot of homework.So I have to finish them as soon as possible.Next,I am going to swim.I think it's an interesting sport.So I like it.The last one is the most important.My achievement is not very ideal.So I have many classes.Them can improve my achievement. Finally,happy birthday to you. Yours Lucy