采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;可适当增加从句和复杂句使用。
The importance of keeping a good mood with the rapid development of the society,our life becomes more and more fast.People in all walks of life must feel pressured,what is more,people,who live under such circumstances,may not be happy.So it is very important to keep a good mood. First of all,today's society is full of competition that develops very quickly.As a result,there is a lot of pressure on everyone.People usually feel stressed as they try hard to do their best in education,career or family situations.Thus,it is necessary for us to keep a good mood.If a person is likely to be optimistic when he faces challenges and competitions and it is likely to success.On the contrary,if a man meets difficult situations and if he keeps good mood,he can also solve the problems and be bound to success All in all,whether our lives are smooth or not,bad or not.we must be keeping a good mood.