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A busy day June 20th,2015 Sunday fine this morning I got up early.After breakfast, I helped my mom with the housework.Then I did my homework,it is very interesting so I did it very well. In the afternoon, I played table tennis with my friend lily,we enjoyed ourselves very much. In the evening, I watched TV with my parents and then prepared myself for the next day's lesson. What a busy day today!