文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳;句式偏短,建议加强复杂句的使用。
Last week, I visited the Beijing wild zoo.When i arrived at the zoo.There were many visitors and they were feeding those monkeys,Others were playing with tiger.When i saw this . I felt humans can get on with animals And i understand that We should protect them. Protect the environment is so important.In the zoo . We can't throw the rubbish everywhere . I know the importance of protect the animals.And i realized that in fact protect the animals is protect ourselves.